Yes - you can judge inner states from body language etc, you just can't say "felt with a single glance" any more than you can say "kicked a ball with his hands." "See his mood with a single glance" possibly.Mercenary wrote:Cheers all,
SteveMill wrote:Interesting developments and a good ending. Must carp about the following para though.
"It took its diverted course into the security section. An agent met Tor and guided him towards the offices. Caran was just stepping out of his office when Tor approached. He instantly felt the mood of the big man with just a single glance. The tone of his voice was the softened tone of a man with something unpleasant to say or do. "
Feeling moods with a glance doesn't really work to convey what you're trying to say.
Cheers Steve,
I've been reading a bit on how to interpret body language, so I'll see if there's a way to better describe the stance and facial expression of the agent.
In a way yes you can quickly tell if someone is happy, sad, angry et al just by looking at them. The stronger the emotion the quicker it is to get an impression of their mood. Ommiting the expression of the agent was an attempt to leave the details to the readers imagination.... obviously didn't quite get there
Indicates that perhaps I need to explore the expressions and motivations of this character within the story a bit more...
By the way the book you recommended is very good and still reading / referring to it...
Merc.
Glad you find the book useful - I'm getting a lot from the reading i'm doing. Less reading more writing is needed.
